I have a bit of a question. Could you please tell me your opinion on this bit of a my story that I've been writing? It would be a big help if you could tell me what you think. ( I haven't edited grammar at all, so if it's off, you know why)
Whispers buzzed inside my head, softly, as I stared at the ceiling. I do not recall hearing them earlier. Something moved at the corner of my eye and I snapped my head around to see that girl siting quietly in the chair across the small dim room.
"What did you do to me?" I choked out, frightened, hands grasping my head as the noise grew louder, more defiant.
She was quiet, still. But a small smug crook